I need help.

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Created Jul 20, 2014 00:42:24

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So i'm writing this narrative (story) for tutoring. (yes I go to tutoring cause i'm a dumb asian, deal with it) and I need help with starters and practically everything. Cause the thing with me and making stories is that I always put some mild or scene in it. And like... that is totally innaproprite for this story. So instead I decided to make a love story. Anyway, here's the plot (there is no plot cause I honestly can't think of anything right now), characters and shiz.

Mark - cold and mean hearted dude who has no manners. he lost his girlfriend 5 years ago in a car crash. he has a personal maid his parents forced him to have. (if you have anymore ideas of how mark should be like, feel free to put it in).

Victoria - sweet, nice, clumsy and stupid girl. she's poor cause her parents died when she was just 10 years old. she so desperately needs a job so she decided to get a personal maid's job. (/gasps. yes she is mark's personal maid. and like i said before, if you have any ideas of how victoria should be like, comment down below).

Jackson - mark's best friend who has a MAJOR crush on victoria ever since high school. and yeah, mark and him kinda get into a fight because of yeap you guessed it, victoria. (if you have any ideas of how jackson should be, feel free to comment down below).

Madison or Maddie - mark's ex girlfriend who died. yes she might've been the nicest girl or prettiest girlfriend, but she was a cheater and a /. she cheated on mark for a guy named ~~jimin~~ jks. (give me a name for the bad guy, cannot be spelt in a korean way cause i doubt that my english teacher can pronunce it) okay but for now its eric. marks most hated dude in the world.

Eric - yeah like i said, he is mark's most hated man on the planet. he was intentionally going to kill mark so that he could have madison but in the end he killed madison instead of mark, so yeah.. stupid jerk. oh and mark is totally thinking that it was his fault so he is regretting and taking it pretty badly. of course he wouldn't think its eric cause he never saw him or who it was driving in the car.

Mark's parents - are the most adorakle parents you can ever find. they are just worried for their son and ship victoria and him together hard.

You guys honestly don't have to help me, but if you want to, then sure fine go ahead. that'll be great. anyway, so yeah, cya and bye.

This story is so mainstream and so freaking obvious who is going to go with who. /facepalm. but i doubt that my english teacher has ever read a story like this.... mehehe.

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calcifer 10 years ago

... Like these specific characters and the forced maid part? Lmao. Go c+p from AFF.
Make it that Eric has a homo crush obsession with Mark instead and in that he confuses his feelings of hatred and revenge with a passionate fixation on Mark.
Victoria should be oblivious and indifferent towards Mark's and Jackson's advances but I really think that the love triangle should be avoided for the greater good of humanity.
Lmao, just make Jackson crush on Mark instead.

url-notfound 10 years ago

Haha, that's totally a generic AFF fic right there, how cute. I would like to help, but it depends who's viewpoint you're going through. Mark or Victoria? And also, is it third person or first person?

sugardaddysuho 10 years ago

( soz this is the second part. Cuz it was too long haha )

You could start the story with maybe the background story of Victoria.
Or something like "slithers of sun light peeked through the curtain's of mark's (or Victoria's) room."
(Lol real cliche but yea) and then from there you can carry on with the day and this can be your introduction to the characters. So if you decide you'll start with Victoria, maybe add her waking up mark, doing chores etc. so that the readers get the idea that she is a maid. And if choose to start with mark. Make sure its obvious that mark is dependent on Victoria. Or you could continue the sentence with "the sound of muffled steps filled the hallway, and eventually they were right in front of mark's room. I few knocks and Victoria had barged into the room. Her cheerful voice ruining mark's peaceful atmosphere" . Just something like that to make it obvious that Victoria is mark's maid.

Lol yea. I probs didn't help much but yea.... Haha. If I did feel free to ask more me more questions, I'm more then happy to help :) and if you answer the questions at the start then that would help me to help you hahah yea. FIGHTING

sugardaddysuho 10 years ago

Lol don't worry! I'm a dumb Asian too when it comes to math haha >_<.
First of all;
- is there a limit for this story, like how many words or pages.
-make a rough outline of the story, you want to know the beginning, middle, , the main part (so the drama), resolution and then the end (I can go into further detail if you'd like)
-Are the characters all still in high school, or university and if so is Victoria attending as well?
-what is the genre you're going for? Angst, romance, horror, etc
-do you have an idea of how the story will end. Will Victoria end up with mark or with Jackson? Will she die? Will she end up with Eric? ( I suggest to have a plot twits, since the story is quite main stream. So if you change up the ending to something no one will expect then it will make it less mainstream and most likely improve your grade. But don't make it too hectic because the reader might get put off.)