Help?

So I have been working on this rp for a few days now that is largely the creation of my own little brain child, To say that I have spent hours writing, editing, and trying to make it work would be an understatement. Now I know there is currently no layout and the visual department is really rough (I will do my best to fix that when I get the chance) because I am focusing more on the content at the moment than the packaging but it would be nice if I could get another set of eyes to take a peak at it. I would like a little input to see sort of what I should fix and amend before officially opening (aside from the layouts because that isnt even done yet). If someone would be interested in taking a look and giving me feedback so I can improve that would be greatly appreciated. 

Thank you for your time.